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She hated them.
Playing an evil dance
the wax melting
earthwards,
as the flame grew;
a cacophony of reds.
Why, she never knew
but since time,
she was indignant,
loathing them always –
the candles.
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Enslaved by loneliness,
amidst the array-
stranger beings and
of conventional bourgeois.
She met him
the other day;
amongst the vile faces.
She smiled, never knowing why.
But she felt her heart
hum a rhythm,
a rhyme new and different
at his eyes,
and those eyes
bewitched her.
All at once.
The day repeated again,
smiled he, this time.
Slowly but firmly
ardour intertwined
luxuriated fondness,
and she was owned;
as he bred her
with an epidemic
of him.
A fine evening,
rays from
the setting sun
playing the clouds;
and the winter mist
biting the warmth
of the day.
The room dimly lit,
His eyes cuddling
her persona.
His lips to her’s;
crave building in
her smell intoxicating;
her touch melting
into his desire;
his hands fluent to her curves
her wants calling him,
and they
dramatically eros.
Her chaos
relished onto him.
Him hypnotised
at her immense smile.
As his finger tips
created art
onto her naked canvas
again & again !!
Her eyes caught the candles.
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She hated them,
the cacophony of reds.
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Here he smiled..
a naughty smirk..
as she closed her eyes
to absorb him.
But then..
He stabbed her
He stabbed her again.
He stabbed her
for the last time.
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Playing an evil dance
the wax melting
earthwards,
as the flame grew.
Why, he never knew
but since time,
she was indignant,
loathing them always.
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Red over his hands
she left unmoving
silent
into perennial sleep.
He smiled deadly.
venomous.
Not lust,
nor desire.
But blood
was his dirty addiction;
Stabbed her thrice,
for she was his third.
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And the flame rose;
by the aroma of the blood.
And he will
never know
why she was indignant,
loathing them always –
The candles.
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Aadhira said:
Wow! A candle could light up, bring hope, be romantic, be soothing, and much more.. And yes it could be deadly! And I could never again look at a candle without this thought creeping in! Coz it’s that deep..
And the style.. That’s what makes your blue moons awesome.. The repetition.. Referring back.. Loved it..
But aren’t you romantically cruel.. 😛 A romantic build up with a killer twist, literally and figuratively.. 😉
Waiting for blue moons.. 🙂
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Awkward Earthling said:
Hope I could get a few more blue moons 🙂
& thanks to you dear for the help always :))
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Aadhira said:
The best thanks is acceptance of help with the same intention of the sender.. So always happy to help the outlines of those blue moons to glitter and keep the reader inspired.. 🙂
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Awkward Earthling said:
Lots of literature in that comment !!! 😀
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Aadhira said:
😀 😀
On a totally unrelated note to the comment, your social skills are just beyond my realm! How do you manage to get these many comments?!
Anyway good to see your blog alive and bubbling.. Keep it up.. 🙂
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Awkward Earthling said:
that’s the #AwkwardEarthling :))
he he !! 🙂
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Shalzzz said:
This is just wow! How you gave different meanings and even went back to those lines! Loved how you designed the whole poem.
Superb, Sam. I can so feel the hatred and loath!
Write more!!
Kohl-Eyed Me
Something’s Cooking
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Awkward Earthling said:
Yes…
I will write more hopefully 🙂
And I am happy not because of the writes, but because of the love you people shower me with 🙂
Thank you Shalini 🙂
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writenlive said:
Welcome back with some superb poetry!
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Awkward Earthling said:
Hey hi hi hi hi :))))
Long long long, no see..How are you, and yes, I am maybe back for a lil while ..
How are you 🙂 Happy to see you after a long time..
And I mean it :))
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writenlive said:
Hey! I am happy too! Good to know you’ll be around for some time 🙂
Hope to read more of such wonderful poetry 🙂
Ah! You changed your gravatar, Samjoth!
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Awkward Earthling said:
Yes Sona 🙂 Life is all busy and new developments ..
So was away from blogging, and now just trying to write something..Dont know for how long 😀
You all know me better !! 😀
And ys, I changed myself..
Made up an online profile, by the name Awkward Earthling..
And, branding myself a lil..
Things that I have learned in blogging.. 🙂
Btw are you on twitter ??
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writenlive said:
New profile looks awesome! Awkward Earthling is very original 🙂
Hope you would write a lot before your next hiatus :A
Aww, no, am not on Twitter 😦 is that where you go when you are not on the blog?
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Awkward Earthling said:
Awkward Earthling is original ?? Explain please 🙂
& yes, if you are into blogging you meed to have a twitter account..
I would say, please make one.. A lot of wonderful n creative people from all genre are available .. 🙂
So would you like to make one, based on your blog account 🙂 ??
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writenlive said:
Of course, Awkward Earthling is original as all your your writing is!
A Twitter account for my blog sounds interesting. However I have absolutely no idea how to go about it and how to manage a Twitter account! I can wait it out, I think!
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Awkward Earthling said:
No no no…Please start Twitter ..
It’s really good for regular bloggers like you..
Trust me..
Start ..and I will help you out..I am sure you would need no help.. 🙂
Ok ?
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writenlive said:
Yes. I’ll need help. However, I’ll start after a month.
I am attempting NaNoWriMo in November. Want to do it? It would be great fun!
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Awkward Earthling said:
No..not November.. Already into a campaign and a busy month too 🙂
but yes looking forward to your writes 🙂
& do ping me.. okies:)
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writenlive said:
Good luck for your campaign. I’ll ping you 🙂
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Awkward Earthling said:
You should ah 🙂
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RamyaRao said:
You are giving me serious poetry goals here. This is absolutely lovely. I like the way you structured it. It was perfect! Can I see at least three posts a week, please ?
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you Ramya 🙂
& you know, how I am managing two posts per week..
But yes, will try to write more..
The awesome support you people give me, is more than what I could ever ask for..
Thank you :)))
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Tina Basu said:
Mr. Awkward you right some serious poetry man. Very nice, keep it up. By end of the month you can make an ebook of poetry
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you Tina 🙂
Yes an e-book of poetry sounds a good plan 🙂
Will come back to you for some technical help :))
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Tina Basu said:
Anyday. anytime
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you Tina 🙂
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scribblingscrabbler said:
Every word beautifully weaved into lines to hold your attention to complete; this poetry was so filled with a story…. i start wid finding tht perfect love story & end up encountering a brutally twisted & disturbed mind….
U know the depths & d way to wade in the dark…. I envy ‘cuz I can’t delve to write; I can only game my words….
Nevertheless, am happy to know u who is blessed with the art of penetration…. (((Hugs)))
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you thank you dearest 🙂
Happy that it touched you, and happy more that we could connect !!
Stay connected always 🙂 & keep up the smile :))
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Modern Gypsy said:
I’m just speechless! I LOVE this – it is so so good! You’ve got a way with words and imagery…don’t you doubt it…and keep writing!
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you Gypsy 🙂
You are one of the few people I respect in the blog world, and heartfelt comments from you mean a lot lot to me..
Thank you for your support always ..
I am obliged 🙂
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saumynagayach said:
Wonderfully penned poem, Sam! I like your style of connecting different forms (emotions and storytelling) in a single verse. Keep writing! 🙂 🙂
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you Saumy 🙂
& happy that I connected across you mate !!
Lets stay connected and bring up more in the world of blogging 🙂
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Ranjini said:
This is awful in a wonderful way. You are a dangerous romantic 😛 This unique structure, the twist, stabbing thrice for being the third and the connection to the candle. You are a poetic wizard and this is my favorite from among all your write ups 🙂
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Awkward Earthling said:
Favourite form all my writes !!??
Thank you dear 🙂 and I am no wizard, just trying my best to write 🙂
& yes, happy that we could connect :))
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Rajlakshmi said:
wow now that was intense, the passion of crime, the flames in between, kind of created a movie scene, with a thumping background score. You writing is brilliant, the way you express emotions so powerfully.
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Awkward Earthling said:
Hello Raj 🙂 Welcome over to the #AwkwardEarthling 🙂
Thank you for those kind comments, and happy that we could get to know each other :))
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deepagandhi said:
Wow..that’s some really good poetry and too deep..cant wait to read the next one!
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you Deepa 🙂
Stay connected !!
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Shalini Sharrma said:
This is too good, your poem is wow. This piece of yours remind me of Porphoryia’s lover a poem by Robert Browning and i don’t know if you have read it but your piece is far twisted and interesting and the way you took candle as imagery plus the way you patterned it like not really like regualr font ! Just wow.
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Awkward Earthling said:
Hello Shalini 🙂
Welcome over to my abode, and thanks a lot lot lot for your insightful comments.
And about the poetry you said, I regret to tell you that I am not very well read. Lazy to read, to be precise :))
But yes, I will read this one 🙂
Thanks to you , for the same 🙂
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Shalini Sharrma said:
Haahah..no problem, am forced to read these British boring poets, at least few of their poems are boring bcz am a literature student. But trust me in 50 years hence, some new GEN will read your poetry as in their curriculum. Keep writing !
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Awkward Earthling said:
My poetry in their curriculum !! 😄😄
he he :))
You are too too too very kind dear earthling :))
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shwetadave09 said:
Omg….i was seeing each scene slowly enacted as both the characters creatively performed an epic saga….superb…need i say more!
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Jaibala Rao said:
I loved the way you used the refrains. This is some great imagery, emotions and poetry right here.
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Awkward Earthling said:
Hey hi 🙂
Welcome over to my space and thank you for your thoughtful comments ..
I am glad to be connecting with you, and lets stay connected :))
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Ruchi Verma said:
Nice poem
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you 🙂
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shalzmojo said:
Whoa!!! I have the chills. So many layered feelings- peeling each to find even more. Loved the word play – lovely writing Sam!
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Awkward Earthling said:
Welcome over to my space Shalini 🙂
Thank you for your kind comments, and I am glad that you could grasp the feel of the poem..
Makes me feel elated to know that 🙂
Visit again, and lets stay connected !!
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Novemberschild said:
Some amazing poetry to read and I loved the word play. Keep writing more.
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Awkward Earthling said:
Thank you 🙂
& thank you for your kindness always :))
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Maniparna Sengupta Majumder said:
The refrain has been used so poetically yet it exudes a different meaning each time. the poem tells a story, illuminating love and passion and revealing the darker side as well…of some demented mind. The two characters have come alive through your words! Wonderfully penned, Sam…:-)
“as he bred her
with an epidemic
of him.” – became a fan of these lines… ❤
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Awkward Earthling said:
he he .. Thank you 🙂
but I have to confess something here..This was not what this was supposed to be.. I started writing something else.. It was candles and something else..then love came in and then it flowed but the negativity, it sprouted and then it ended.. I was uncertain on how people would gauge 🙂 but happy with the results ..
Thank you dear friend 🙂 Thanks for your support n your comments always 🙂
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menakabharathi said:
That’s a beautifully written poem, Yes! a candle evokes so many emotions within oneself, and differs from person to person. you have chosen words carefully and made an effective emotional impact.
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Awkward Earthling said:
Hello Menaka 🙂 and welcome over to my abode..
Yes..we all have our perceptions and our horizons which we define and project..
That what makes the world a wonderful place to live in.. All the similarities and the contrasts 🙂
Thank you for stopping by and the kind comments 🙂
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